This term we have been learning about narrative. A few things I have been focusing on are: using a variety of our new sentence types as well as using show not tell more often.
I still need to gain confidence with our new sentence types.
The Future
The once beautiful, appealing city had become an ancient, neglected one. The sky was dim, the clouds were
dense and the grassy vines had overgrown the entire place. As for the inhabitants, there were none. They were
all missing. All but one. His name was Keanu. He planned to find his people and bring them back.
Keanu searched the buildings for essentials. He scanned the room. A box. In the box, he found a tablet. The
energy from the tablet traveled through his arm. He would use the energy to kill Spacecraft-2200. Ted’s dull
plastic eyes stared deep into Keanu’s soul. “Don’t look at me like that. Have some faith,” Keanu scolded Ted.
As Keanu calmly walked the alleyway he heard a noise, WOOOSH his attention snapped towards the noise. Shock
and terror came over him. He began to doubt himself, he knew that this thing existed but he hadn’t thought it
could have been that big. Keanu’s mind returned to reality, he reminisced the reason he was doing all of this. He
grabbed Ted from his bag and determined, “we will get her back, no matter what.”
Without hesitation, Keanu bolted across the city to his bike immediately driving away from the spacecraft-2200
he looped around so that he was behind it without knowing. He was on a bank just above the top of the spacecraft.
Mindless. He somersaulted, landing on the ship he wielded his sword stabbing it right into the space craft's weak
point. He was happy, not just happy he was proud. Proud of being able to overcome fear and have courage. He
grabbed Ted. “We did it,” his words were full of joy. Ted’s face remained emotionless, his thermal fur brushing
against Keanu’s grip.
There was one more thing: finding Her. He began looking around for things, secret tunnels or hidden doors that he
hadn’t seen before. Then it almost skipped his mind. He had seen an odd-looking door earlier. He got on his bike
and raced through the city back to the door. There it was before his eyes, a cellar. He busted the door down with
panic. Civilians came running out but one of them caught his eyes. There she was. Delilah. - Delilah is 17 - They
pranced to each other, just like in the movies. “I missed you,” he told Delilah. “I missed you too,” Delilah told her f
ather. “Do you have Ted?” Delilah asked. “Yeah I do, here you go,” Keanu answered. Ted was Delilah’s teddy; he
was the only thing Keanu had left of her after she was abducted. Now they were reunited.
It is now September 17th 3027. Delilah’s 21st. To celebrate her birthday she was to travel overseas to see her
mother’s family. Due to her mother’s death whilst giving birth, Delilah had never met her mother’s side. But she
was a big girl now, she was going to meet them or so she thought. On her flight, she fell asleep. “Seat Belts
please,” spoke the pilot. Delilah did not hear. 10 hours later. Just like Madagascar movie down the plane went, the
left engine burning in a scorching fire. BOOM Delilah met her mother.
