Finishing It Off:)

 In class, we read a story. Thirst to be exact. The author left us on a cliff-hanger- the title should give you a hint as to what this is about- so we were allocated to make an ending.  I was told to put down what I think I'm good at, so I've written it beside this sentence... Everything. Kidding.

What I think I'm doing well at: descriptive words, personification, and sentence types.

What I need to work on: Show-not-tell.

As her parents continued to interrogate her, Brooke began feeling pressured. She didn’t know much about how her brother got the water, all she knew was what Ryder had told her earlier. “There’s enough water, you can have a shower. No one will know.” So she repeated those words to her father. He marched out the door roaring Ryder’s name. Half-an-hour, of calling her son, later worry began climbing through their mother’s thoughts.

The three set out to search the surroundings of their humble abode; the house was slowly crumbling to pieces. Trekking through the dry, parched leaves that danced through the buoyant breeze, panicking thoughts drove through each of their minds. Could he be lost? What if he hurt himself? Meanwhile, Ryder stood in the middle of the woods trying to find his home. His eyes caught a glimpse of fabric rushing through the rough, dark woodland. “Mum!” he squealed in victory.

Charging towards the figure, he enveloped her in his arms. Tears of guilt scurried down his cheeks, which were now covered in scratches. “I'm sorry, I shouldn’t have taken the water. I’ll do anything, I'm so sorry,” her eyes traveled down to her son’s face; it was a pitiful sight. “I understand why you did it, but something like this cannot be forgiven easily… You will do three months worth of work for the Carters.'' She left no room for argument. “Okay. I’ll do it,” Ryder spoke as a frown of determination sat on his face. Brooke and their father came rushing towards the two. Seeing his son cry during this hard time made his father’s heart throb. Brooke and Joshua (father) embraced their family in a bone-crushing hug. As the bundle of four shared a heartwarming moment, even the clouds cried tears of joy.